It should be considerably longer, though. Too much of the background is taken for granted and I'd like to know more about the characters - I'd buy this on Amazon if it was a, say 250-page novel.

Shouldna made that left turn at Albuquerque...

Made me laugh out loud.

This biographical episode really got to me.

This was wonderful, Peter. Hilarious! I really appreciated the slow build as the satire grew more and more ridiculous and over the top as it went along. You should definitely plan to explore more PC corporatist satires like this. There are lots of possibilities.

Seldom do I get that hooked on a continuing story (in fact, I generally HATE them - I'm impatient, and don't like to wait).

Wow! Story compelling, characters gritty and real - 5 star story.

I was on the edge of my seat reading this story. The twist at the end was marvelous. Had me crying with happy tears!

I find myself looking forward to every Tuesday afternoon. Thank You!

Nice work...great allusion: the Hex.

An interesting world and a different take on the substance of the 4th of July holiday. (File the Chesterton reference under "meets expectations," but bonus points for the Cruxshadows quote!)